Post Secret: Stand out...why not?

The audience for my post secret are young people who are influenced by media, celebrities, and fashion. My post secret focuses on the theme of being different and it is okay to not look ordinary. Essentially breaking out of conformity, is okay. I included pictures of celebrities with exotic looking hair or makeup to show that these people are incredibly famous and have a massive fan following yet still are able to obtain all of this while being different. I also included a picture of a girl eating a cupcake defying the idea that we all need to be skinny and well-mannered to be liked. My design is composed of quirky, unusual looking images of people who embrace their appearance and enjoy standing out.

Anti-Ad peer review

The peer review for my rough draft went well. It always helps me to get insight from another person regarding which way I should take my paper next and what concepts I should try to focus and expand off of. From this peer review, I am going to focus on expanding more on the description of my actual anti-ad and also be sure to include what audience it is geared towards. Also I may try to incorporate the effect these athletes are having on it's audience and how the audience may be influenced (childhood obesity, false advertising). Children see these sporty cool guys advertising McDonald's and they think by eating the food themselves they will be able to be just like them. However, by eating the food consistently their bodies will eventually transform to become less and less like these athlete's. This is an example of false, or misleading advertising.

Ad spoof

This ad is spoofing the typical fashion advertisements that appear everywhere these days. Typically, especially for high quality fashion designer advertisements, they advertise their clothes on very skinny women making atypical expressions. In the background there tends to be some sort of phrase or word that sets the mood or theme of their fashion line. This ad replaces that catch phrase with the models real thoughts. Her appearance does not even need to be changed from the way it would typically appear in an un-spoofed advertisement because it still demonstrates this look of despair; her hunger. Her body and clothes do not need to be changed either because she is already stick thin, and looks in the need of food.

Advertisments

This Covergirl advertisement, found in People Magazine, uses celebrity Taylor Swift to help sell their product. Taylor has a very sensual look on her face. She is not outwardly smiling however she does not wear a straight face either. She is speaking with her eyes and relaxing her lips. Her hair is blowing in wind which helps to enhance the covergirl catch phrase, "easy breezy beautiful covergirl." The emotion Taylor is showing also helps to enhance the display of the product on her skin. She does not have a lot of eye makeup on and is not wearing any jewelry. Her clothing is also very neutral. All of these factors play a role in attracting more attention to the foundation on her skin, which is the product in which covergirl is advertising. The advertisement also uses a quote from Taylor Swift regarding her view on the product. She states, "why do I love clean? because it's sensitive to my skin!" This adds some credibility to the product if someone were questioning whether or not the product really would be a good choice for their sensitive skin.
The ad promotes a lifestyle that puts a heavy influence on beauty. It displays a rather simple image, but one where Taylor Swift looks simply beautiful. People who are interested in having perfect skin and like trying different types of makeup would be attracted to this advertisement and product. It definitely attracts a female audience because men would most likely have no interest in using foundation for their skin. It also attracts a rather young audience especially since Taylor Swift is a young celebrity who has a fairly young fan base. Aka my grandma would not really be fascinated by a product that Taylor Swift is used to advertise. The ad invites me to believe that if I use this product my skin will be as clear and flawless as Taylor Swift's.

Great News!

It has finally happened! All of my dreams are coming true and I could not be more excited. Last night we were out by the lake sitting there and talking about what seems like everything. Now this is something that we do occasionally,and although, especially recently, I have been hoping that he would whip out a ring of his pocket and seal the deal once and for all, I was never expecting it to actually happen. But I guess someone was looking down on me and gave him the push to do so. We were sitting on the grass with the lights reflecting off of the lake and unto on our faces. We had been talking for probably about twenty minutes now and were deep into conversation. Somehow the conversation led into what the future had in store and as smooth as he is, he reached into his pocket and held out a box encasing a beautiful fourteen carrot diamond ring. I was astonished and can confidently say that that moment was by far the best moment of my life. I feel so overjoyed that I have found the person who I love and am certain that he is the one I want to spend every moment of the rest of my life with.
On Monday I returned to school where I first told my close friends. They were all so happy and some of the other teachers and I plan to go to lunch to celebrate. Next I tried to explain what had happened to my Kindergartners telling them that this man who I love very much asked me to marry him. I showed them the ring and said it was a present that I get to keep and wear forever and ever since he and I plan to be together forever and ever. They all sat there with this look of awe on their face. The little girls were so cute and all rushed to see the ring while the boys glared more hesitantly from the distance. However, there were all very interested and excited to hear my story at story time.
I can not explain to you the emotions I have been feeling these past few days. I am beyond happy and overjoyed. I can not wait to start planning the wedding and will be needing your help. I am hoping that you can fly in sometime later in the month to help getting everything started. There is so much to do and so much to think about. Who do I invited, what should the gowns look like, what kind of food should we have. I already see the stress coming. Good thing there is one thing I already knew since we were little girls playing "barbie wedding." Emily will you be my maid of honor?

~Jen


It has finally happened! Last night we were out by the lake sitting and talking. Now this is something that we do occasionally,and although, especially recently, I have been hoping that he would whip out a ring of his pocket and seal the deal once and for all, I was never expecting it to actually happen. But I guess someone was looking down on me and gave him the push to do so. We were sitting on the grass with the lights reflecting off of the lake and unto on our faces. We had been talking for probably about twenty minutes now and were deep into conversation. Somehow the conversation led into what the future had in store and as smooth as he is, he reached into his pocket and held out a box encasing a beautiful fourteen carrot diamond ring. I was astonished and can confidently say that moment was by far the best moment of my life. I feel so overjoyed that I have found the person who I love and am certain that he is the one I want to spend every moment of the rest of my life with.
On Monday I returned to school where I first told my close friends and co-workers. They were all so happy and some of the other teachers and I plan to go to lunch to celebrate. Next, I tried to explain what had happened to my Kindergartners telling them that this man, who I love very much, asked me to marry him. I showed them the ring and said it was a present that I get to keep and wear forever and ever since he and I plan to be together forever and ever. They all sat there with this look of awe on their face. The little girls were so cute and all rushed to see the ring while the boys glared more hesitantly from the distance. However, there were all very interested and excited to hear my story at story time.
I can not explain to you the emotions I have been feeling these past few days. I am beyond happy and overjoyed. I can not wait to start planning the wedding and will be needing your help. I am hoping that you can fly in sometime later in the month to help getting everything started. There is so much to do and so much to think about. Who do I invited, what should the gowns look like, what kind of food should we have. I already see the stress coming. Good thing there is one thing I already knew since we were little girls playing "barbie wedding." Emily will you be my maid of honor?

~Jen

Peer Review Reflection

I have found that I am much more confident in this paper than I was in my last. I feel that I have a much better grasp on my focus and feel like there is a lot of analysis that is already incorporated into my paper. I want to work on adding in more specific details to my paper and replacing the generalizations. I tend to make generalizations in my writing and am really trying to focus on getting away from that in this paper. I think that adding in more examples can also help make my writing more clear. There is nothing major that I want to change. I think I have a lot of good concepts included so far and definitely want to keep my same framework. I'm considering looking through my essay and seeing if my paragraphs are organized in an order than makes the paper easy to follow or if they can be arranged in a way that like topics can be closer together. All in all I see no need to make any drastic changes to this paper just simple revisions. I think that the peer revision helped me to organize my thoughts better and also help me to see where exactly I was at with my writing.

Response to feedback

The feedback on my rough drafts always helps me. I enjoy hearing about the things that I've done well because it is always reassuring to know that I am on the right track. It is also nice to see where I can improve my work and get ideas for what I can add to my paper to make it even better. When I go back and revise my paper these comments always come  in handy and help me focus on where specifically I should focus on expanding or editing my work. I like the questions that Miss Lang presents in her comments. As I read them I experience that "ah huh" moment where I am intrigued by what is being asked and am excited to answer it. All in all the feedback really helps me to improve my paper and set me on the right track for making my way up to my final draft.